请耐心的高手纠错如下列文章：Dear Toby:How are you Did you know how my last day off was?Ok,let me tell you :It was a very good weather that day -----sunny and hot ,so I thought,that is a good day to go swimming with friends.But when I ca

请耐心的高手纠错如下列文章：Dear Toby:How are you Did you know how my last day off was?Ok,let me tell you :It was a very good weather that day -----sunny and hot ,so I thought,that is a good day to go swimming with friends.But when I ca
请耐心的高手纠错
如下列文章：
Dear Toby:
How are you Did you know how my last day off was?Ok,let me tell you :
It was a very good weather that day -----sunny and hot ,so I thought,that is a good day to go swimming with friends.But when I called my friends ,my parents syied "You should finish your homework first!".So ,I had to stay at home to do my awful homework,and I did and did so long time .I still remember:in the morning ,I did it ; in the afternoon ,I did it ;
in the evening ,I still did it!How much homework did I need to do It really likes a big mountain!And I think I can't stand the life like this ,because it makes me so tired .
At last,I hope you have good days off ,and don't like me .
yours,Bob
这是初中的习作,请各位找找错,不说主题如何,就说语法和单词（有无错误）,星期一是交的,怕出错,请各位指教,并尽快.

请耐心的高手纠错如下列文章：Dear Toby:How are you Did you know how my last day off was?Ok,let me tell you :It was a very good weather that day -----sunny and hot ,so I thought,that is a good day to go swimming with friends.But when I ca
“syied”应该是拼写错误.said才对.
“awful homework”这个搭配有点问题.boring比较好.无聊的.
“and I did and did so long time ”这个语法错误而且语义不明.
“I still remember:in the morning ,I did it ; in the afternoon , I did it ;in the evening ,I still did it!”一般起强调作用不这么表达.I still remember that it's whole day that I just sat at my desk and did my homework.
“don't like me.”like如直接跟在助动词后作动词用.意为“喜欢”,作“……像……”时它是一个介词.必须加上be动词才得以构成完整意群.因此这个属前后文搭配不当的语法错误.而且也很少这样用法.Do not share my pain.我觉得这么用会比较好.但是我给出的翻译是一个引申式句子.不知道是否符合初中要求.可能老师会判成错误句子也不定.具体你自己斟酌.后面的“It really like……”同理是错误的.必须加be动词.
“at last”终于.用法不当.“In the end,”
基本上我看了一次就点出这么几个十分明显的错误.另外文章总体上受中文思维影响比较深.不符合西方语言习惯.尤其是前后句子逻辑比较中式化.另外缺乏逻辑副词加以连接.使得文章连贯性较差.
比如开头中“How are you ?Did you know how my last day off was?”这句话除了“Did”要改为“do”以外.总体上并没有大的语法错误.但是这样开头是中文思维的写信方式.具体上我也不能整篇帮你重写.总之斟酌一下思维方面吧.
其他问题不大.