麻烦英语好的朋友帮我改一下错.BeforeI was in a big construction investment company as a data member,because mymajor is Architectural/Engineering Tech.every day facing the computer FilingDocuments,write work letter.the boss was satisfied

麻烦英语好的朋友帮我改一下错.BeforeI was in a big construction investment company as a data member,because mymajor is Architectural/Engineering Tech.every day facing the computer FilingDocuments,write work letter.the boss was satisfied
麻烦英语好的朋友帮我改一下错.
Before
I was in a big construction investment company as a data member,because my
major is Architectural/Engineering Tech.every day facing the computer Filing
Documents,write work letter.the boss was satisfied with my work,my colleagues
have always taken care of me and looked after me,because I was the
smallest company,the only who intern without graduationcertificate.At that time,I have a Independent
free life,I rented a house near the company .cook and wash clothes by myself.
Sometimes go shopping,playing mah-jong with colleagues(in Sichuan
and Guan Dong playing mah-jong is a very common form ofentertainment),
it seems as if I began a easy new life .

麻烦英语好的朋友帮我改一下错.BeforeI was in a big construction investment company as a data member,because mymajor is Architectural/Engineering Tech.every day facing the computer FilingDocuments,write work letter.the boss was satisfied
I worked as a data member in a big construction investment company,because my major is Architectural/Engineering Tech.As my job required,I should face the computer to fill documents and to write work letter every day.The boss was satisfied with my work.Because I was the smallest and the only who joined without graduation certificate in the company,my colleagues have always taken care of me.At that time,I rented a house near the company.I can cook and wash by myself and I felt free and independent.
Sometimes,I went shopping,playing mah-jongg with colleagues (in Sichuan and Guan Dong playing mah-jongg is a very common form of entertainment),it seems as if I had began a easy and new life .

I was served as a data member in a big construction investment company, because my
major is Architectural/Engineering Tech. Filing Documents and writing work letters filled up my day. The boss was...

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I was served as a data member in a big construction investment company, because my
major is Architectural/Engineering Tech. Filing Documents and writing work letters filled up my day. The boss was satisfied with my work, my colleagues have always taken care of me, since I was the youngest in the company, the only one who interns without graduation certificate.
At that time,I had an independent and free life, I rent a house near the company,cooking and washing clothes by myself.Sometimes I spent time going shopping and playing mah-jong with colleagues.(in Sichuanand Guan Dong playing mah-jong is an extremely common form of entertainment),It seems as if I had begun a new life.
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第一行because 去掉 前面用句号
第二行 is 改为was every day前 改为逗号 Filling前是逗号 F改为小写
第三行 write改为writing 把letter改为letters my前加and
第四行 把have 去掉 把taken改为took 把 and looked after me 去掉 然后句号 was后面...

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第一行because 去掉 前面用句号
第二行 is 改为was every day前 改为逗号 Filling前是逗号 F改为小写
第三行 write改为writing 把letter改为letters my前加and
第四行 把have 去掉 把taken改为took 把 and looked after me 去掉 然后句号 was后面加in
the改为a
第五行 在the only 前加i was 后加one who后面的句子错 需要根据你的意思改
have 改为was
第七行rented 改为 have rented cook and wash 改为cooking and washing
第八行 go前加i playing前加and with后加my

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