英语作文赏析,急.Everyone can do something for our environment .For me,I should try to save electricity in my daily life.For example,if i am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening.I will always remember to turn off the lights .In

英语作文赏析,急.Everyone can do something for our environment .For me,I should try to save electricity in my daily life.For example,if i am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening.I will always remember to turn off the lights .In
英语作文赏析,急.
Everyone can do something for our environment .For me,I should try to save electricity in my daily life.For example,if i am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening.I will always remember to turn off the lights .In order to protect our forests,I will use paper wisely.I should try to use both sides of paper whenever it's possible.I will not use like paper cups and disposable chopsticks beacuse they're made of wood.I believe that doing all these small things will improve our environment and help our world a better place to live in.
要说出这个作文好的方面,不足的方面.词的用法.哪些词用的好.
句式语法语态等的用法.好在哪里.

英语作文赏析,急.Everyone can do something for our environment .For me,I should try to save electricity in my daily life.For example,if i am the last person to leave the classroom in the evening.I will always remember to turn off the lights .In
这篇文好方面应该是思路清晰,观点全面深刻.
全文用了whenever 引导的状语从句,if 虚拟语气从句（但是用的是一般时态 ）,disposable chopsticks 指的是一次性筷子,翻译得很到位,出彩句：I believe that doing all these small things will improve our environment and help our world a better place to live in.其中用了多个从句和不定式
不足的:
有部分语法和逻辑错误:
I should try to use both sides of a piece of paper .paper在这里是不可数名词,表统称；a piece of paper 才是表达纸张的意思
I will not use( something )like paper cups and disposable chopsticks beacuse they're made of wood.
For me,I can try to save electricity in my daily life.前面的everyone是can 后面的I 最好保持一致
For example,if i am the last person to leave the classroom,I will always remember to turn off the lights不一定是晚上才开灯
PS.在中国式作文是很不错的一篇文了 ,但是以外教的眼光来看就显得有点“中式”英语.也许是被外教退文退得多了,挑了很多毛病而不是好的方面来说 还请见谅哈~